DD and The Three Bears. Help! ;p

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    Originally Posted By chickendumpling

    DD needs a muse and I suggested you all! lol.

    She's been given a homework assignment that I think is a hoot and thought you all might have some fun with it too because you are a pretty danged witty group. :)

    So here is the assignment: Write a prologue to Goldilocks and The Three Bears.

    How fun is that?!

    Here are the questions, but you have complete literary license (within community standards of course, lol).

    1. What happened before the traditional story begins?

    2. Who was there?

    3. Why did it happen?

    4. When did it happen?

    Please feel free to answer one question or all or whatever. I promise she won't plagarize. She is not asking you do her homework for her - but, she is a kid so if I let her she would! LOL. She just thought it would be fun to share with you guys and hear what silly/fun/imaginative things you might have to say.

    In the classic dumpling style this does not necessarily have to be a cohesive story - contributions to the thread may be made in a completely random, silly, play-pen style!

    I can't wait to see what you guys come up with! LOL. I am looking forward to disneydad's animal brigade to make a guest appearance at some point!

    Thanks in advance guys!
     
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    Originally Posted By LPFan22

    This sounds fun but gosh I don't have a creative bone in my body. I think 2oony is the man for the job!

    =)
     
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    Originally Posted By u k fan

    I've got a few ideas. I'll work on this over the weekend!!!
     
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    Originally Posted By teddibubbles

    You see ..There is Africa!
    and in Africa there are Rhinos.
    and they don't have any spinach!
    and they want spinach!
    so the poor Rhinos have to get on a plane
    and fly over here to find spinach!
    because there is no spinach in Africa!
    so them poor Rhinos. looked very carefully
    all over out here for spinach.
    because there is no spinach in Africa!
    They saw a Little girl named Goldilocks.
    She let them come to her house where they found
    food! and lots of spinach ! that the little Girl Goldilocks. had dumped off her dinner plate. and hid
    in a old box in the corner of her closet! because she hated spinach!
    and the Rhinos were very happy! because there is no spinach in Africa! and they just loved spinach!
    well being the greedy thing they are! and being wild animals as they are! they pooped in her chairs. and ate every crumb in the house! then they just jumped in Goldilocks bed!. well I can tell you that house STANK!
    until poor little Goldilocks could stand it no more!
    so she ran off looking to find some food and shelter!
    and all of this happed because. You see ..There is Africa!
    and in Africa there are Rhinos.
    and they don't have any spinach!
    and they want spinach!

    because there is no spinach in Africa!



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    Originally Posted By u k fan

    Here is the first part of my prologue.

    Please bear in mind (no pun intended) that this is very rough and although I kinda know where I'm heading I'm still not sure exactly how to get there yet so there may be rewrites, but without further ado, here's Part 1 (please excuse spelling and grammar)

    Our story begins on a stormy October evening. It was the kind of night when really you just wanted to be at home by the fire, however for two people that fateful evening the desire to be home would have dire consequences. What seemed at first to be two completely unrelated incidents would soon rock the world of a girl and a bear forever.

    I’m Mother Goose and this is Fairytale File No.17 – Goldilocks and the Three Bears

    It had been a fairly uneventful day at the office for Papa Bear or “Ursa Major†as he was known to the guys at Fictional Furry Friends Inc. As a Manager in the PR Dept. he was well known throughout the various departments of the business and was consequently quite popular. Things were fairly quiet at the moment. He hadn’t even needed to issue a statement apologizing for the actions of a wolf for nearly two weeks.

    He watched as the hands on the clock clicked into the 5 o’ clock position and began to get ready to leave.

    “Hey, Ursa Major! How d’you fancy joining a few of us guys for a drink over at Fables?â€

    It was Barry, the youngest of the Three Billy Goats Gruff.

    Papa Bear looked at his watch.

    “Ok, but it’ll have to be a quick one. I’ve got a busy weekend planned and I can’t be home late.â€


    Fables was a small bar just a few doors down from Papa Bear’s office and he and his colleagues would often stop by for a drink after a long day at the office. It was owned and managed by Rick, a retired Woodcutter who would often spin a yarn or two about his various run-ins with wolves.

    Most of the usual crowd had stopped by that evening. As well as Barry there was Larry the eldest of the Three Billy Goats Gruff, and Garry the middle brother. All three of them worked in Strategic Planning. They were also joined by the Three Little Pigs; Thomas, Richard and Harold who worked in the Crisis Control Department (with varying degrees of success) and Chicken Little who was Head of Blue Sky Thinking.

    Everyone was pleased that the week was over and as Papa Bear gulped down his last mouthful of soda (he was driving) the mood in the bar was relaxed and jolly.

    Garry was at the bar ordering more drinks.

    “Ursa, got time for one more?†He called out.

    Papa Bear looked out of the window at the dusky evening sky.

    “I dunno, it looks like a storm’s brewing and I’ve really gotta get home.â€

    “Aw, come on! Just one quick one for the road?†Garry replied.

    “Ok, but then I’ve really got to go.†Papa Bear sighed.

    He decided that surely five more minutes wouldn’t make much difference.

    Would they...?



    What do you think?!!!
     
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    Originally Posted By tiggerdis_

    Wow, I think it's fabulous!
     
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    Originally Posted By alexbook

    Hooray for the rhinos! They deserve all the spinach they want!
     
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    Originally Posted By u k fan

    Thank you!

    Hopefully, Part 2 will be ready tomorrow!!!
     
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    Originally Posted By chickendumpling

    FABU!!! :) DD loved 'em! (And so did I.) Highly entertaining! She giggled all through teddibubbles' and read ukfan's outloud to the family. Very high honors coming from DD! lol.

    You guys are just the best ever for playing! And I have the biggest smile on my face right now. :)

    <--- eagerly awaiting Part Deux and other contributions from my wonderful LP family! :)
     
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    Originally Posted By u k fan

    I'm feeling the pressure with Part 2 as I'm struggling to get my head round the character of Goldilocks.

    Is she an innnocent victim or a little minx?!!!
     
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    Originally Posted By EdisYoda

    innocent little minx?
     
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    Originally Posted By u k fan

    I've nearly finished part 2!

    Sorry, I was very sleepy last night!!!
     
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    Originally Posted By Bucky N Satchel

    That was BRILLIANT!
     
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    Originally Posted By u k fan

    Just want to say sorry for the delay. I'll try and get part 2 up tonight and then part 3 will follow. I'm aiming for 3 parts!!!
     
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    Originally Posted By u k fan

    Ok, here's part 2.

    I have a couple of things to mention. First, I found this part much harder to write because as mentioned I struggled with Goldilocks and I also had to get my two protagonists (there's a long word) together at the end.

    Second, I wrote this in two sittings so if the tone of the storytelling changes half way I apologize.

    And Third, As you'll see I've referenced other Fairytale Heroines and I really debated whether to use the name Beauty or Belle. I went for Beauty figuring that Belle was too Disney, but if you're not sure who I meant, that's who!

    So here it is - Part 2

    “Awww, great!†Goldilocks complained out loud to no one in particular.

    The storm that had been building in the sky for the last half hour finally decided to act upon what had up until now had been idle threats and rain. Goldilocks pulled her cloak in tighter and put up her hood as the rain began to fall heavier.

    She had never truly understood why girls in Fairytales only wore cloaks. Snow White, Cinderella, even the smart ones like Beauty. There they were running about in the dead of the night with only a cloak to protect them from the elements. She figured it was Red Riding Hood who started it. She defeats one wolf (with help) and suddenly there she is on the cover of Vanity Fairy in her stupid hood. Next thing you know everyone’s wearing them.

    And now here was she trying to get home in the pouring rain with nothing but a light blue cloak for protection. What she wouldn’t give right now for a raincoat a pair of galoshes. She vowed then and there that if she ever met Red Riding Hood she’d give her a piece of her mind.

    Dusk had turned to night by now and as the wind whipped around her she lowered her head and ploughed on doing her best to stay clear of the spray of passing cars as they roared past her.

    In her mind she began a rough draft of the letter she would write to Vanity Fairy and all of those other magazines to complain about their endorsement of unsuitable outerwear. She figured she’d have time to write the letters while she was in bed recovering from pneumonia. As she finally completed her letter with what to her would be a scornfully sarcastic

    Yours fashionably ill,

    Goldilocks

    She looked up through the squally weather to get her bearings.

    The rain had been getting heavier and was now lashing around her. Her face was drenched as she looked up and she had to wipe her eyes with her hands before she could really see anything. When she finally was able to open her eyes properly she was shocked by what she did see.

    Instead of the large cityscape she was expecting, she found herself standing on a country path surrounded by forest. It was now very dark and instead of the streetlights that she usually used to find her way she was going to have to make do with what little light was forcing it’s way through the cloudy night sky. Had she not been so scared she would have started amending that imaginary letter she had been writing to include getting lost, but the fear of running into something in the woods after dark was enough to make her panic. She’d heard enough stories to know that there wasn’t always a Woodcutter nearby. She remembered that educational film at school “The Gingerbread Man: Not All Fairytales End Well†and was not keen on being featured in it’s sequel.

    Without looking where she was going she ran.


    Papa Bear was late.

    “I’m really for it.†He huffed to himself as he checked the clock on his dashboard.

    He had only stayed for one more drink, but the storm meant that he had to drive slower than usual and visibility out there was awful.

    He leaned forward to get a better look. He was out of the city by now and other than the darkness ahead the only thing he could really see were bright flecks of rain as they shot through his headlights.

    Suddenly from nowhere a girl in a blue cape shot out in front of him.

    The girl turned towards the car, her expression of fear illuminated by the cars headlights

    Papa Bear hit the breaks knowing it would be too late.


    I hope you like!!!
     
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    Originally Posted By u k fan

    Wow!

    That was long!!!
     
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    Originally Posted By Autopia Deb

    I'm on pins and needles!
     
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    Originally Posted By u k fan

    Part 3 will be up soon.

    Or I could do a Jim Hill and never finish it!!!
     
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    Originally Posted By chickendumpling

    BRAVO!!! How totally fun and creative! I love the whole cloak/Vanity Fairy thing. LOL. You have such a great imagination. And what a cliff you have left us on!

    You need to copyright this immediately!

    <-- looking forward to the next chapter. :)
     
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    Originally Posted By chickendumpling

    I showed this to DD before she went to bed tonight. ... She gives it an enthusiastic two thumbs up! Just thought you'd like to know - she's an avid reader so she's a pretty tough critic.
     

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